A patch for the 'geom' chapter
Manolis Kiagias
sonic2000gr at gmail.com
Mon Nov 24 19:34:39 UTC 2008
Giorgos Keramidas wrote:
> On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 13:51:07 -0500, Tom Rhodes <trhodes at FreeBSD.org> wrote:
>
>> On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:36:07 +0200
>> Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr at gmail.com> wrote:
>>
>>> http://people.freebsd.org/~manolis/geom.txt
>>>
>
>
>> This looks pretty good actually. I would probably change the
>> following:
>>
>> + <example>
>> + <title>Labeling Your Boot Disk's Partitions</title>
>>
>> to:
>>
>> <title>Labeling Partitions on the Boot Disk</title>
>>
>> And there are a lot of "You" references. I've tried to write this
>> without invoking the user as much as possible and may make reading the
>> entire chapter difficult. I would prefer we not talk to the user
>> though.
>>
>
> I am not sure if I will have the time to read the full patch tonight,
> but Tom is quite right about avoiding "you" when possible.
>
>
Thanks. I will try to rephrase most parts into passive voice where
possible. I guess I am somewhat influenced by the Greek translations,
where sometimes passive voice sounds unnatural ;)
Cheers,
manolis
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