A patch for the 'geom' chapter

[Rene Ladan]

2008/11/24 Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr at gmail.com>:
> Giorgos Keramidas wrote:
>> On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 13:51:07 -0500, Tom Rhodes <trhodes at FreeBSD.org> wrote:
>>
>>> On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:36:07 +0200
>>> Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr at gmail.com> wrote:
>>>
>>>> http://people.freebsd.org/~manolis/geom.txt
>>>>
>>
>>
>>> This looks pretty good actually.  I would probably change the
>>> following:
>>>
>>> +      <example>
>>> +    <title>Labeling Your Boot Disk's Partitions</title>
>>>
>>> to:
>>>
>>> <title>Labeling Partitions on the Boot Disk</title>
>>>
>>> And there are a lot of "You" references.  I've tried to write this
>>> without invoking the user as much as possible and may make reading the
>>> entire chapter difficult.  I would prefer we not talk to the user
>>> though.
>>>
>>
>> I am not sure if I will have the time to read the full patch tonight,
>> but Tom is quite right about avoiding "you" when possible.
>>
>>
> Thanks. I will try to rephrase most parts into passive voice where
> possible.  I guess I am somewhat influenced by the Greek translations,
> where  sometimes passive voice sounds unnatural ;)
>
I think the same is true for the Dutch language.  Using passive voice
sometimes sounds too formal/distant IMHO (it makes me think of legal
texts).  Active voice also involves the reader more.  It also makes it
possible to refer to e.g. 'their computer' instead of 'a computer', which
can be useful in examples.

Regards,
Rene
-- 
http://www.rene-ladan.nl/

GPG fingerprint = E738 5471 D185 7013 0EE0  4FC8 3C1D 6F83 12E1 84F6
(subkeys.pgp.net)