svn commit: r40403 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq

[Eitan Adler]

On 17 December 2012 12:50, Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk at mit.edu> wrote:
> On Mon, 17 Dec 2012, Eitan Adler wrote:
>
>> Author: eadler
>> Date: Mon Dec 17 16:01:53 2012
>> New Revision: 40403
>> URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/40403
>>
>> Log:
>>  Modernize ppp-drop-heavy-load to conform with current defaults.
>>
>>  Submitted by:  Daniel O'Connor
>>  Approved by:   bcr (mentor)
>>
>> Modified:
>>  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq/book.xml
>>
>> Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq/book.xml
>>
>> ==============================================================================
>> --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq/book.xml     Mon Dec 17 16:01:51 2012
>> (r40402)
>> +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/faq/book.xml     Mon Dec 17 16:01:53 2012
>> (r40403)
>> @@ -7245,13 +7245,12 @@ add 0 0 HISADDR</programlisting>
>>         <answer>
>>           <para>If you have Link Quality Reporting (LQR) configured, it
>>             is possible that too many LQR packets are lost between your
>> -           machine and the peer.  The &man.ppp.8; program deduces that
>> -           the line must therefore be bad, and disconnects.  Prior to
>> -           &os; version 2.2.5, LQR was enabled by default.  It is now
>> -           disabled by default.  LQR can be disabled with the following
>> -           line:</para>
>> +           machine and the peer.  &man.ppp.8; deduces that
>
>
> Hmm, starting a sentence with an entity, somewhat questionable.
>
> Why not "Such packet loss causes &man.ppp.8; to deduce that"?

No objection to this.


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Eitan Adler
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