RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook
Gabor PALI
pgj at FreeBSD.org
Wed Dec 3 19:43:42 UTC 2008
Manolis Kiagias wrote:
> I like the improvements too :)
> If I were to make a few changes (at the edge of these being doc-bikesheds):
Absolutely not, it IS suggested by the FDP Primer [1]:
``Avoid redundant phrases
Try not to use redundant phrases. In particular, "the command", "the
file", and "man command" are probably redundant.''
Hopefully, I will reach this section of the FDP Primer in the Hungarian
translation soon :) Thanks for the comment!
I fixed the parts in question, so you can proof-check the results here:
(in HTML:)
http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH
(in unified diff format:)
http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/splash.screen.section.patch.diff
Regards,
:g
[1] http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en/books/fdp-primer/writing-style.html
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