docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook.

[Julien Gabel]

The following reply was made to PR docs/85353; it has been noted by GNATS.

From: "Julien Gabel" <jpeg at thilelli.net>
To: "Gary W. Swearingen" <garys at opusnet.com>
Cc: bug-followup at FreeBSD.org
Subject: Re: docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the 
     GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook.
Date: Sun, 28 Aug 2005 22:30:17 +0200 (CEST)

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 >>>    <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly
 >>> -    created disk stripe.</para>
 >>> +    created disk stripe:</para>
 
 >> It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be
 >> redundant in sentences that ends with ":".
 
 > Agreed.
 
 >> In decreasing order of verbosity:
 >>
 >> The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created
 >> disk stripe.
 >>
 >> This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
 >>
 >> To manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
 
 > This one may be better i think, since it is more concise.
 
 >> And while opinions differ, IMO, it should be "newly-created".
 
 > Don't have a preference about this one.
 
 
 Ok.  I reworked a little bit this one, trying to adapt it to what
 was said.  In the same time, try to avoid the repeated words like
 "following" and "created".
 
 Please find a new patch attached.
 
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