docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook.
Julien Gabel
jpeg at thilelli.net
Sat Aug 27 20:47:01 UTC 2005
>> <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly
>> - created disk stripe.</para>
>> + created disk stripe:</para>
> It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be
> redundant in sentences that ends with ":".
Agreed.
> In decreasing order of verbosity:
>
> The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created
> disk stripe.
>
> This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
>
> To manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
This one may be better i think, since it is more concise.
> And while opinions differ, IMO, it should be "newly-created".
Don't have a preference about this one.
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