svn commit: r40759 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/snapshots

[Eitan Adler]

Author: eadler
Date: Sun Jan 27 12:51:03 2013
New Revision: 40759
URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/40759

Log:
  Minor word niggles on the snapshot page:
  
  - if something is obvious, don't say it
  - use &os;
  - people don't really use netnews
  - don't discourage bug submissions about documentation
  
  Approved by:	bcr (mentor)

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/snapshots/index.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/snapshots/index.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/snapshots/index.xml	Sun Jan 27 01:45:15 2013	(r40758)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/htdocs/snapshots/index.xml	Sun Jan 27 12:51:03 2013	(r40759)
@@ -69,7 +69,7 @@
 	These are <em>not</em> releases, these are <em>snapshots</em>,
 	and it is important that this distinction be preserved.
 	Although people can and will, of course, refer to snapshots
-	by date in mail or netnews, do not confuse them.</li>
+	by date in email, do not confuse them.</li>
 
       <li>Snapshots might not include package sets, but will generally
 	include a ports tree.</li>
@@ -78,12 +78,12 @@
 	For example, <tt>README</tt> may still refer
 	to a previous release.  This is because that is much less important
 	than getting the real bug fixes and new features out for testing.
-	Please do not send a bug report about the documentation.</li>
+	Please do not send a bug report about version numbers.</li>
     </ul>
 
-    <p>Your feedback on these snapshots is, of course, greatly welcome.
+    <p>Your feedback on these snapshots is greatly welcome.
       They are not just for our benefit - those who are coming to rely
-      on FreeBSD for mission critical applications should welcome
+      on &os; for mission critical applications should welcome
       a chance to get at more updated bits in a structured fashion.
       You can also use these snapshots as tangible evidence that your
       feedback is getting incorporated and that you (hopefully) will not have