svn commit: r42336 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/docbook-markup

[Warren Block]

Author: wblock
Date: Sun Jul 21 01:36:45 2013
New Revision: 42336
URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/42336

Log:
  Refine and correct the acronym example.

Modified:
  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/docbook-markup/chapter.xml

Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/docbook-markup/chapter.xml
==============================================================================
--- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/docbook-markup/chapter.xml	Sun Jul 21 00:45:18 2013	(r42335)
+++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/docbook-markup/chapter.xml	Sun Jul 21 01:36:45 2013	(r42336)
@@ -1307,12 +1307,13 @@ This is the file called 'foo2'</screen>
 	<para>Usage:</para>
 
 	<programlisting><sgmltag class="starttag">para</sgmltag>FreeBSD is without doubt <sgmltag class="starttag">emphasis</sgmltag>the<sgmltag class="endtag">emphasis</sgmltag>
-  premiere Unix like operating system for the Intel architecture.<sgmltag class="endtag">para</sgmltag></programlisting>
+  premiere &unix;-like operating system for the Intel
+  architecture.<sgmltag class="endtag">para</sgmltag></programlisting>
 
 	<para>Appearance:</para>
 
 	<para>FreeBSD is without doubt <emphasis>the</emphasis>
-	  premiere Unix like operating system for the Intel
+	  premiere &unix;-like operating system for the Intel
 	  architecture.</para>
       </example>
     </sect2>
@@ -1334,17 +1335,17 @@ This is the file called 'foo2'</screen>
 
 	<programlisting><sgmltag class="starttag">para</sgmltag>Request For Comments (<sgmltag class="starttag">acronym</sgmltag>RFC<sgmltag class="endtag">acronym</sgmltag>) 1149
   defined the use of avian carriers for transmission of
-  Internet Protocol (<sgmltag class="starttag">acronym</sgmltag>IP<sgmltag class="endtag">acronym</sgmltag>) data
-  transmission.  The quantity of <sgmltag class="starttag">acronym</sgmltag>IP<sgmltag class="endtag">acronym</sgmltag> data
-  transmitted since then is unknown.<sgmltag class="endtag">para</sgmltag></programlisting>
+  Internet Protocol (<sgmltag class="starttag">acronym</sgmltag>IP<sgmltag class="endtag">acronym</sgmltag>) data.  The
+  quantity of <sgmltag class="starttag">acronym</sgmltag>IP<sgmltag class="endtag">acronym</sgmltag> data currently
+  transmitted in that manner is unknown.<sgmltag class="endtag">para</sgmltag></programlisting>
 
 	<para>Appearance:</para>
 
 	<para>Request For Comments (<acronym>RFC</acronym>) 1149
 	  defined the use of avian carriers for transmission of
-	  Internet Protocol (<acronym>IP</acronym>) data
-	  transmission.  The quantity of <acronym>IP</acronym> data
-	  transmitted since then is unknown.</para>
+	  Internet Protocol (<acronym>IP</acronym>) data.  The
+	  quantity of <acronym>IP</acronym> data currently
+	  transmitted in that manner is unknown.</para>
       </example>
     </sect2>