docs/134147: Unclear sentence (perhaps missing a word), suggestions attached

[Benedict Reuschling]

>Number:         134147
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       Unclear sentence (perhaps missing a word), suggestions attached
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          open
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:
>Class:          doc-bug
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Fri May 01 21:30:01 UTC 2009
>Closed-Date:
>Last-Modified:
>Originator:     Benedict Reuschling
>Release:        7.2-PRERELEASE
>Organization:
The FreeBSD German Documentation Project
>Environment:
FreeBSD atlantis.reuschling.org 7.2-PRERELEASE FreeBSD 7.2-PRERELEASE #18: Thu Apr 23 22:00:35 CEST 2009     root at atlantis.reuschling.org:/tank/obj/usr/src/sys/ATLANTIS  i386
>Description:
The following sentence in the FAQ seems to be missing a word or should be rephrased around the word "causes": 

"There is a known problem when enabling &intel; Enhanced SpeedStep from the BIOS causes the kernel to start printing <errorname>calcru</errorname> messages like this:"

I have attached three suggestions on how to make the sentence more clear.
>How-To-Repeat:
Read the sentence and try to make sense of it as it is. 
>Fix:
Apply one of the following diffs to make the sentence more complete/understandable.

Suggestion 1:
--- book.sgml.orig      2009-05-01 23:04:42.092926621 +0200
+++ book.sgml   2009-05-01 23:05:15.349031797 +0200
@@ -3871,7 +3871,7 @@
        </question>
 
        <answer>
-         <para>There is a known problem when enabling &intel; Enhanced
+         <para>A known problem when enabling &intel; Enhanced
            SpeedStep from the BIOS causes the kernel to start printing
            <errorname>calcru</errorname> messages like this:</para>


Suggestion 2:
--- book.sgml.orig      2009-05-01 23:04:42.092926621 +0200
+++ book.sgml   2009-05-01 23:07:28.640448164 +0200
@@ -3872,7 +3872,7 @@
 
        <answer>
          <para>There is a known problem when enabling &intel; Enhanced
-           SpeedStep from the BIOS causes the kernel to start printing
+           SpeedStep from the BIOS.  It causes the kernel to start printing
            <errorname>calcru</errorname> messages like this:</para>
 
          <screen>calcru: runtime went backwards from 6 usec to 3 usec for pid 37 (pagezero)


Suggestion 3:

--- book.sgml.orig      2009-05-01 23:04:42.092926621 +0200
+++ book.sgml   2009-05-01 23:08:27.557631772 +0200
@@ -3872,7 +3872,7 @@
 
        <answer>
          <para>There is a known problem when enabling &intel; Enhanced
-           SpeedStep from the BIOS causes the kernel to start printing
+           SpeedStep from the BIOS, which causes the kernel to start printing
            <errorname>calcru</errorname> messages like this:</para>
 
          <screen>calcru: runtime went backwards from 6 usec to 3 usec for pid 37 (pagezero)



Patch attached with submission follows:

--- book.sgml.orig	2009-05-01 23:04:42.092926621 +0200
+++ book.sgml	2009-05-01 23:08:27.557631772 +0200
@@ -3872,7 +3872,7 @@
 
 	<answer>
 	  <para>There is a known problem when enabling &intel; Enhanced
-	    SpeedStep from the BIOS causes the kernel to start printing
+	    SpeedStep from the BIOS, which causes the kernel to start printing
 	    <errorname>calcru</errorname> messages like this:</para>
 
 	  <screen>calcru: runtime went backwards from 6 usec to 3 usec for pid 37 (pagezero)


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