RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook
Gabor PALI
pgj at FreeBSD.org
Sun Nov 30 21:49:40 UTC 2008
Manolis Kiagias wrote:
> Here are a few nits you may want to act on.
Thank you for your review. I fixed all the problems you pointed out and
created a new version [1][2].
> I can't tell about technical accuracy.
Hm, it seems I should really test the description myself :)
> "Note that, a 320x200 “splash screen” image will be displayed as a
> small block in the center of a solid white background screen." => I
> don't understand what you mean by this. Since the resolution at boot
> will be 320x200, the splash screen will still fill the entire screen.
> Do you mean to compare the size of the image to a typical desktop?
To be honest, it was (blindly) imported from the original text. As far
as I remember (I used splash screens about three years ago), it wants to
tell you something like "if you have a 320x200 image but the resolution
is higher, then it will be put in the middle of the screen". Anyway, I
removed this sentence, since I do not see any clear connection with the
other sentences.
> While discussing text mode screensavers, it might be worth mentioning
> that you can get the list of available savers by ls
> /boot/kernel/*saver.ko or something along that line.
Instead of this, I simply referenced the splash(4) manual page, it
should be enough.
> I also feel some longer sentences could use a few commas.
I tried to insert those commas, and split some longer sentences up into
smaller ones.
> I've only peeked at the SGML, but I am sure there is nothing to fix
> there :)
Thank you for trusting my SGML skills :)
Note for native speakers: please, review!
Regards,
:g
[1]
http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/11/30/splash.screen.section.patch.diff
[2]
http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/11/30/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH
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