docs/55923: [patch] articles/laptop: fix bad english + minor sgml issues

[Josef El-Rayes]

>Number:         55923
>Category:       docs
>Synopsis:       [patch] articles/laptop: fix bad english + minor sgml issues
>Confidential:   no
>Severity:       non-critical
>Priority:       low
>Responsible:    freebsd-doc
>State:          open
>Quarter:        
>Keywords:       
>Date-Required:
>Class:          update
>Submitter-Id:   current-users
>Arrival-Date:   Sun Aug 24 06:20:13 PDT 2003
>Closed-Date:
>Last-Modified:
>Originator:     Josef El-Rayes
>Release:        FreeBSD 4.8-STABLE i386
>Organization:
>Environment:
System: FreeBSD daemon.li 4.8-STABLE FreeBSD 4.8-STABLE #8: Tue Jul 22 18:16:23 CEST 2003 root at daemon.li:/usr/obj/usr/src/sys/CUSTOM i386


	
>Description:
		doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/laptop/article.sgml:
		1) "...FreeBSD can not seem to use..."
		this is not correct english
		
		2) added very useful link to a freebsd laptops compatibility
		database

		3) replaced "FreeBSD" with &os;

	
>How-To-Repeat:
	
>Fix:

	

--- article.sgml.diff begins here ---
--- article.sgml.orig	Sun Aug 24 14:21:53 2003
+++ article.sgml	Sun Aug 24 15:06:27 2003
@@ -14,19 +14,19 @@
 
 <article>
   <articleinfo>
-    <title>FreeBSD on Laptops</title>
+    <title>&os; on Laptops</title>
 
     <pubdate>$FreeBSD: doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/articles/laptop/article.sgml,v 1.15 2003/06/20 18:02:53 blackend Exp $</pubdate>
    
     <abstract>
-      <para>FreeBSD works fine on most laptops, with a few caveats.
-        Some issues specific to running FreeBSD on laptops, relating
+      <para>&os; works fine on most laptops, with a few caveats.
+        Some issues specific to running &os; on laptops, relating
         to different hardware requirements from desktops, are
         discussed below.</para>
     </abstract>
   </articleinfo>
 
-    <para>FreeBSD is often thought of as a server operating system, but
+    <para>&os; is often thought of as a server operating system, but
       it works just fine on the desktop, and if you want to use it on
       your laptop you can enjoy all the usual benefits: systematic
       layout, easy administration and upgrading, the ports/packages
@@ -42,7 +42,11 @@
       part of the &os; documentation.  You might very well find some
       information if you type the name of your laptop model and the
       word <quote>&os;</quote> into a search engine of your
-      choice.</para>
+      choice.
+      Additionally there is a &os;-specific online database which aims to
+      give information on hardware issues with laptops, the 
+      <ulink url="http://gerda.univie.ac.at/freebsd-laptops/">FreeBSD Laptops Compatibility List</ulink>.
+      </para>
 
   <sect1>    
     <title>XFree86</title>
@@ -107,7 +111,7 @@
     <title>PCMCIA (PC Card) devices</title>
 
     <para> Most laptops come with PCMCIA (also called PC Card)
-      slots; these are supported fine under FreeBSD.  Look through
+      slots; these are supported fine under &os;.  Look through
       your boot-up messages (using &man.dmesg.8;) and see whether these were
       detected correctly (they should appear as
       <devicename>pccard0</devicename>,
@@ -145,8 +149,8 @@
       log messages about new devices being enabled.</para>
 
     <para>There have been major changes to the pccard code
-      (including ISA routing of interrupts, for machines whose
-      PCI BIOS FreeBSD can not seem to use) before the FreeBSD 4.4
+      (including ISA routing of interrupts, for machines where
+      &os; is not able to use the PCI BIOS) before the &os; 4.4
       release.  If you have problems, try upgrading your system.</para>
  
   </sect1> 
@@ -156,7 +160,7 @@
     <title>Power management</title>
 
     <para>Unfortunately, this is not very reliably supported under
-      FreeBSD.  If you are lucky, some functions may work reliably;
+      &os;.  If you are lucky, some functions may work reliably;
       or they may not work at all.</para>
 
     <para>To make things a little more complex, there are two existing
--- article.sgml.diff ends here ---


>Release-Note:
>Audit-Trail:
>Unformatted: