[src] cvs commit: src/release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/relnotes/common new.sgml

[Christian Brueffer]

On Thu, Aug 31, 2006 at 08:50:00AM -0700, Bruce A. Mah wrote:
> If memory serves me right, Daniel Gerzo wrote:
> > Hello Bruce,
> > 
> > Thursday, August 31, 2006, 4:54:06 PM, you wrote:
> > 
> >> bmah        2006-08-31 14:53:57 UTC
> > 
> >>   FreeBSD src repository
> > 
> >>   Modified files:        (Branch: RELENG_5)
> >>     release/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/relnotes/common new.sgml 
> > 
> >> +    <para><application>netcat</application> has been updated from the
> >> +      version in a 4 February 2005 OpenBSD snapshot to the version
> >> +      included in OpenBSD 3.9.</para>
> >> +
> > 
> > Maybe it should be better to write it like:
> > 
> > netcat has been updated from the version included in OpenBSD snapshot
> > as of February 4th 2005 to the version included in OpenBSD 3.9. ?
> 
> Hey Daniel--
> 
> I think that what I wrote is grammatically correct, in that "4 February
> 2005" modifies "OpenBSD snapshot".  I don't have any objections if you
> want to change it, although in your text you should probably do s/in
> OpenBSD snapshot/in an OpenBSD snapshot/.  Also I personally don't write
> dates as "February 4th 2005" but I'm probably not the right person to
> wave the consistency banner either.  :-)
> 
> I'll think about it some more when I'm next in the file (if you haven't
> already changed it, that is).  (This text now exists on HEAD, RELENG_6,
> and RELENG_5.)
> 

FYI, your entry looks perfectly fine to me.

- Christian

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